A Clean-Well Lighted Place Re-vision

Author's Note: This is a re-vision of my other piece, "A Clean-Well Lighted Place".  I am trying to score a 10 in organization.

An old deaf man sits at the bar alone drinking his alcohol.  There is a young, impatient, selfish, and rude waiter.  The other waiter is a middle-aged, patient, polite, and respectful waiter.  The young waiter just wants to leave the restaurant and close up.  He doesn't want the old man to keep drinking.  On the other hand, the middle-aged waiter can connect to the old deaf man because he is somewhat old himself too.  The old waiter connected to the old deaf man because he felt at a time that he couldn't sleep and was depressed as well.  The old waiter's personality is sort of happy on the outside, but crushed and alone on the inside.  The young waiter's personality is rude and selfish on the outside, but on the inside he is just really tired and wants to go home.  In the story, A Clean Well-Lighted Place, by Ernest Hemingway, the cafe represents a safe and secure place for the old deaf man, and is very different from the bar that the old waiter visits.

Even though you should feel sympathy towards the old, deaf man, I feel more sympathetic toward him watching the videos.  The music plays a big role in the videos because it sets a sympathetic and sad tone towards the end.  In the beginning of the video the music sounds sort of scary and suspenseful.  The light in the café resembles comfort for the old man.  He knows he can take a bottle of brandy and go home, but that wouldn’t be the same as sitting in a well-lighted place with company of others.  Although he doesn’t really communicate with the waiters, he still likes their presence. 

 While I feel more sympathetic toward the old man in the videos, I also feel bad for the older waiter as well.  The bar that the waiter goes to at the end of the night is really loud and not very well lit.  He didn't seem to enjoy the company of others because there were too many people.  This bar sort of represents a dark place for the waiter because he did not like it there.  Personally, I didn't mind the long screen shots because I could listen to the music in the background and focus on that.  If I were a person who was bothered by the screen shots, I probably wouldn't have finished the videos in the first place.  The short story was obviously different because you couldn't see anything, only read and visualize.  I liked the videos better because I am more of a visual learner so I like to see things.

Although I feel more sympathetic for the old man in the videos, when I read the story I could picture how the bar was very different than the cafe.  It was noisy and there were a lot of people there.  As apposed to the cafe, where there was no noise and it was clean well lit place.  In my opinion, the cafe would be a much more pleasant place to be in because it wasn't loud and there weren't people mauling each other's faces.  

Everyone feels a little lonely sometimes. Whether you're going through a break up or loosing a loved one, everyone has that moment of despair.  Everyone needs to cope somehow.  The cafe was the old mans coping place away from his home.  In life everyone has that moment of depression, even if it's only for a little while.  You just have to keep your head up and go forward.